Thursday, May 13, 2010

Collaberative Short Poem


One Moose Trumps Seven Deer


Backlit on the apron of the forest,
the scrim of daylight shadows fading,
the mushrooms snore, the ferns curl,
all but the meadow sleeps.

(Title by Jan. 1st 2 lines, Kass. Last 2 lines Sherry. Be careful. What you say in comments, may turn up in a poem)

21 comments:

  1. Very successful co-operation. (Hope our politician s man age to do as well!) Most impressive result.

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  2. Yes, I like the collaboration. A moose at dawn or dusk definitely gets the heart thumping.

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  3. DAVE - Thanks. I'm amazed you got your comment through. I've been struggling with blogger and how randomly it manages to space lines. This has been in and out of draft 3 times. Thanks for hanging in there.

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  4. PAUL C - Thanks to you as well. I hope people check out the linked authors' blogs.

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  5. i like the poetry, as well as the way it came about.



    very cool.

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  6. Especially love photo and title ... as usual, you are able to gift us something lovely and unique.

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  7. As you well know, I love the collaborative efforts. This was a lovely one! And nothing in that comment lends itself to poetry.

    WV - flari. Have you yet set up that flari tea party I requested in that original post?

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  8. Very creative! Your readers are kindred poetic spirits that lend to just this sort of thing... and the effect is masterful...

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  9. I know puns aren't endeering, so I'll avoid making any mention of chocolate moose...
    For a story that doesn't begin with once apron a time this poem evokes quite a tail (seven white tails?).

    Lovely little collaborative piece, this. : j

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  10. maravillosa!
    i'll see your deer, and raise you 2 bighorn sheep.

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  11. I love when Limes throws out a challenge.

    This was a lovely one.
    not one for the ages
    not too short
    not too long
    But written well
    from a couple
    of sages.

    or perhaps I'm being a little (WV)
    abisiv in my praises.

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  12. @ Tag ~ Ha! You are wonderful, Sir. Double-dog dare ya to make something (poetic) out of nothing. I sense your poetry moving forward in leaps and bounds. You're really onto something for which you have a knack.

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  13. Snoring mushrooms! That just strikes me as funny.

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  14. late to the party. jan, the title was inspired!

    kass- you stitch a good collage and i *heart* the word scrim.

    come see come saw come scrim.

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  15. late to the party. jan, the title was inspired!

    kass- you stitch a good collage and i *heart* the word scrim.

    come see come saw come scrim.

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  16. Seamless and delightful.

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  17. Dear Kass, an absolutely unique post and poem. Delightful.

    And thank you so much for the comments to my poems.

    Davide ( Tommaso )

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  18. I love it! What a great idea! :o)

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  19. so creative and beautiful!
    love collaborative poems... they are sort of a dialog between souls...

    sharing is all!

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